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November 19, 2012
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sorry for arriving late on the train to life.
i made you wait
and waiting you stood, clad in grey
you were faceless among cherry blossoms of red
that day.

the train pulled in at 12 o’clock
but i don’t know if that’s midnight or midday anymore
this journey has taken an ice age.
those catholic-oil-painting clouds have
forgotten my name
and i’d say i mind but really i don’t
because you still waited for my train
all the same.

for one moment there i swear we chugged
through ponds of weeds and dragonflies
and i caught one and pulled off its wings
grounded it to a crane fly state
then spat it back up in life’s careless face
and still this pathetic train chugged on
at a thousand miles an hour
into the sun.

occasionally i could feel lava
eating at the metal of this carriage and
i wasn’t scared
i promise i wasn’t
because through the clouds of smoke and steam
you were still running faithfully
beside me through that clogged carriage window
waving handkerchiefs at the driver.

and when i finally pulled into life
there you were sweat-stained, ash-grey
sooty and sweet on the saffron platform line
where together we jumped over
onto those electric tracks
and traversed the veins of earth
hand in hand
marvelling time.
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successwithhonor Dec 13, 2012  Student Writer
spectacularly poetic, clever, and beautiful. fantastic piece
iamalazycapricorn Dec 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, I'm glad you enjoyed. Thanks for the fave too. :) :heart:
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iamalazycapricorn Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. Have faved the article and will take a look at the other artists. Thanks again. :) :heart:
That is actually quite good. Love is sweet and we may wait for eternity for the one we love displaying the scars of life. The ending was excellent. Love that transcends the planet. Nicely done.
iamalazycapricorn Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much. :) :heart:
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